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there's
a kind
of longing
that stops
your breath
mid-dance,

a hammer
through your
record player heart;

all the organs stop
to gawk at the commotion.

it burns up
your gums
like a french kiss with
whiskey,
your teeth rotting
even as your lips embrace:
toxicity.

it throws your heart
again and again
against your ribs:
relentless.

but you
you are left
with staggered breath
and a smile,

because you've learned to want for this life
just as thoroughly you wanted to leave it.
Enjoy! 
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PyroAnubis Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student General Artist
This is very well written and thoughtful.
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much! ^^ 
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I-Guardian-l Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
This is absolutely incredible. Imagery throughout and power in every word. I could only hope to write such poetry. Great job! :) 
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
..... o.o 

So kind, good sir. 

Thank you! :huggle: 
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I-Guardian-l Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
Your quite welcome. :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Imagery galore here. :love:
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for all the attention today!!! You're too kind! 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It was my pleasure. <33
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
AWWW!!! :glomp: 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love: !
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xColorblindRainbowx Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
always such powerful language and imagery :D
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
.....thank you! :heart: I've missed you, madam! 
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a hammer 
through your 
record player heart

i mean wow lol nice one 
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks sir! I'm glad you enjoyed it. 
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shadytales Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Writer
love it, very well written
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thaaaank you! :D
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ParaisaDesign Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014   Digital Artist
A paradox... beautifully written. :love:
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
..... :heart:

Thanks a thousand million times! :D 
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ParaisaDesign Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014   Digital Artist
You're always welcome my dear. :hug:
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D :huggle: 
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Wow. I think I remember, just vaguely... sometime around 1985.. I may have felt something similar. Hmm.. suddenly I want to lie down and bite my kneecaps. (stolen imagery there...)
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't even sort of exist in 1985....feel old? :')

You remember a thing I wrote?!?! I don't even remember things I wrote! xD 
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
I am only as old as my age. So I feel old; but I know that I am not as old as I will be tomorrow. And if you do not remember things that you wrote, how did you know that YOU are the one who wrote it? Hmmmmmm????
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I was only teasing, sir.

I remembered such only after thinking about it. Sounded familiar, at least, but I had to think to realize I'd written it. 
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Hahahaha.. pffft! I was only teasing as well. I am not so quick to take offense - quite the opposite.  Hey, I almost made the acronym PFT. Reminds me of somebody's photo page.

I remembered the visual as soon as I imagined lying in fetal position. I will probably always see them together now. I have an abnormal memory - randomly identic and somewhat photographic. If I remember a line from a book, I can often see the section on the page where I should find it. When I am wrong, however, then I will never find it because I get stuck in a false paradigm that keeps me from becoming objective again. Every blessing has a thorny side, I suppose.

No school today? We are all snowed-in over here - no work for me. I sit holed-up in my cave trying to catch up on my INHF projects. I should probably close the windows before I have to shop-vac the carpet again... hehe
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hey! That's me! That's MY page!

So a thing I made....is permanently in your memory? Well that's horrifying...

No school all week. I'm on February break. It's quite lovely. 
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shep4life Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a hammer 
through your 
record player heart

Nice
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, thank you! ^^ :bow: 
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shep4life Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime, anytime
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Duly noted! ^^
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